02-10-2007 05:36 PM
Second, is there some unwritten rule about only having 2 sections of dialogue per paragraph? I read somewhere that that was absolutely verboten and I don't see it often, but I have seen times when a writer has used three or more bits of dialogue laced throughout a paragraph. Always the same person speaking of course, but things are broken up by actions. There have been times when I've really had to go through contortions to get everything situtated correctly without resorting to letting the character speak more than twice.
02-10-2007 06:43 PM
Even if the second person can't get a word in edgewise (some talkers DO go on at length!), they're apt to react somehow. Holding up a hand to stop the flow of words; yawning widely; picking up a carving knife to ... no, sorry.
How long is too long for a character to talk? That's where the fine art of author choice comes in -- it will depend on the situation and the character. You don't want the reader to forget the other character is there.
So that's why you've noticed what seems to be a two-sentence rule -- it's because fairly frequently we want the reader to notice what the other person in the conversation is doing, even if they're not talking.
02-11-2007 02:25 PM
Go to Leigh's site. On the left hand side of the screen there area a row of buttons. Click "Help for Writers." The third section down is titled "Exercises, Worksheets and More." Under that is a hot link for "Classroom on the Web." Dialogue is the 7th button on the left hand side of that screen.
Hope that helps.
02-13-2007 07:36 PM
Thanks for giving it the old school try!
08-13-2007 12:19 PM
The heroine should run into hero not wall. You could do the whole mainly chest thing and how it feelt like she ran into a wall.
"I don't kill infants." might be a better comeback.
I posted an alternative intro in the rommance writing post. My main character is a body guard/mercenary. It's complicated.
Love to read more