2012 Monday Challenge: A First Line Every Week

[Brandi_R]

The man with the megaphone was clear: there would be no exit out of town on Route 12 for at least another twenty-four hours.

[Darkkin]

It was a small clustering of blossoms, pale pink and perfect, newly fallen to the pebbled beach, but it was enough, she had passed this way not a quarter of an hour prior.

[GS2991]

" You won't believe me but I sware when I turned to her screaming I saw a huge eagle carry off my daughter. "

[Brandi_R]

Jack set his whisky on the little table the last tenants had left on the porch.

[chad]

A cool ocean breeze blew under the porch of the general store, raising some of the attached flyers perpendiculary to the town bulletin board, making them appear to defy gravity and finally blowing with such strength that one bright red flyer tore cleanly off the board and floated down to the sandaled feet of Christopher Landsea, who quickly pinned the flyer with one foot, reached down with one hand and snatched the flyer out from under his sandal just before the breeze was about to die.

Chad

PS- What's the world's longest sentence? Oh well, anyway.....

[chad]

Laughter is a sapphire blue.

or

Laughter is a

   sapphire

     blue.

Chad

PS- This, interestingly, could be a first line to a poem, or just good as something like a haiku? Sometimes I'm done with just one line.

[GS2991]

Yeah, they call me a list of names for robbing that bank , but they would have never known if you would have just kept you mouth shut.

[optic_i]

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chad wrote:

A cool ocean breeze blew under the porch of the general store, raising some of the attached flyers perpendiculary to the town bulletin board, making them appear to defy gravity and finally blowing with such strength that one bright red flyer tore cleanly off the board and floated down to the sandaled feet of Christopher Landsea, who quickly pinned the flyer with one foot, reached down with one hand and snatched the flyer out from under his sandal just before the breeze was about to die.

Chad

PS- What's the world's longest sentence? Oh well, anyway.....

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Hi Chad,  That was really well done !      Optic

[MacMcK1957]

Although Wilson certainly had no recollection of making such a purchase, the presence of the emu in his kitchen could not be disputed.

[Darkkin]

So these were the eyes of the ghost, she that sang in the heart of the gale, dwelling in the deepest fathoms...

[chad]

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optic_i wrote:

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chad wrote:

A cool ocean breeze blew under the porch of the general store, raising some of the attached flyers perpendiculary to the town bulletin board, making them appear to defy gravity and finally blowing with such strength that one bright red flyer tore cleanly off the board and floated down to the sandaled feet of Christopher Landsea, who quickly pinned the flyer with one foot, reached down with one hand and snatched the flyer out from under his sandal just before the breeze was about to die.

Chad

PS- What's the world's longest sentence? Oh well, anyway.....

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Hi Chad,  That was really well done !       It's the first line to my very first novel, "The Heart of a Shark" - so it was what I would consider to be "novel quality" writing- the kind we pay for- isn't that awful? But novel quality effect achieved- thanks! Chad

[optic_i]

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chad wrote:

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optic_i wrote:

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chad wrote:

A cool ocean breeze blew under the porch of the general store, raising some of the attached flyers perpendiculary to the town bulletin board, making them appear to defy gravity and finally blowing with such strength that one bright red flyer tore cleanly off the board and floated down to the sandaled feet of Christopher Landsea, who quickly pinned the flyer with one foot, reached down with one hand and snatched the flyer out from under his sandal just before the breeze was about to die.

Chad

PS- What's the world's longest sentence? Oh well, anyway.....

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Hi Chad,  That was really well done !       It's the first line to my very first novel, "The Heart of a Shark" - so it was what I would consider to be "novel quality" writing- the kind we pay for- isn't that awful? But novel quality effect achieved- thanks! Chad

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  Hi Chad, Novel quality indeed !  

  Good Luck  with your book !      Optic 

[Brandi_R]

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chad wrote:

PS- What's the world's longest sentence? Oh well, anyway.....

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An interesting question that's been on my mind since I read your post. I imagine it depends upon what kind of sentence you're looking for. Anyone can string together a lot of words to try and claim the top prize. Perhpas we're looking for the longest sentence in literature. Apparently there's some debate about this. I've read there's a sentence in Faulkner's Absalom, Absalom!  that weighs in at 1,288 words. I've read the novel, but didn't do any word counting, so I can't attest to that detail's credibility.

Interestingly, here's a short story that's one long sentence: “Space, Whether, and Why." It's 1,394 words. 

[chad]

"That was great!- The punctuation breaks it, but no periods and no paragraphs- which was pretty clever. Too heavy a reliance on psychology and psychiatry- done well here, I might add....

Chad

[Darkkin]

An indigo sail, molten kissed,

Billowing out to a full and mighty breadth,

Unfurled and blowing, small rents peek and glow,

Eyes of stars opened by a comet's flight.

[GS2991]

Before the cuse turned it bitter and black I loved to sail the sea, now I only do it to save her.

[Darkkin]

...Such were the faded words on the tattered page, a fragment of a forgotten dream drifting with the wind...

[GS2991]

I looked past the rifle and into his cold dark eyes thinking, asking myself "is his heart, is his blood just as cold?"

[passi0nate_1]

It's 4 AM and I've forgotten how to sleep again. 

[Zalen_Redlaw]

The folks in the little settlement I wandered into didn’t take kindly to strangers and I knew didn’t have a hope, what with my worn weather-beaten clothes and empty pockets—empty except for this odd shaped gold nugget I kicked up in the dust about a mile out of town.