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Chloe Angelilly part 1
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04-02-2012 04:04 PM
Re: Chloe Angelilly part 1
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04-03-2012 03:25 PM
I don't know if this was on purpose or if the board changed it, but it was kind of hard to read with it all being just one big block. Especially when you changed perspective a few times.
I didn't really feel any transitions in between the change of perspective, so the changes felt very abrupt and was lost there for a moment.
The story sounds interesting though. Keep at it.
Re: Chloe Angelilly part 1
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04-03-2012 04:51 PM
Re: Chloe Angelilly part 1
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04-15-2012 12:43 AM
I like it. Sorry I'm just now getting to it though.