02-05-2011 09:39 AM
I'm 12 years old and this is my first poem. Please tell me what you think. Thank you
You in my bosom
I in your breast
Is much more than two single lover's test.
Lips are so soft,
Softer than I can bear.
Just like my own fresh bakery heart.
I love you.
Do you love me?
Is the question of eternity.
02-05-2011 10:31 PM
guitargirlHL, this short and sweet poem is so good that it should appear on a Hallmark card. You did great!
Thank you CasperAZ. I appreciate you honesty and thank you for having the time to see my poem. I love to write and nothing (besides my guitar) can make me happier.
02-06-2011 12:40 PM
Very impressive for only being 12 years old.....great job....in reading your poem I feel that you have the potential to write some amazing stuff....