DO YOU LOVE ME?

[guitargirlHL]

I'm 12 years old and this is my first poem. Please tell me what you think. Thank you

You in my bosom

I in your breast

Is much more than two single lover's test.

Lips are so soft,

 Softer than I can bear.

 Your sweet,

Sweet heart

Just like my own fresh bakery heart.

 I love you.

Do you love me?

Is the question of eternity.

[CasperAZ]

guitargirlHL, this short and sweet poem is so good that it should appear on a Hallmark card.  You did great!

[guitargirlHL]

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CasperAZ wrote:

guitargirlHL, this short and sweet poem is so good that it should appear on a Hallmark card.  You did great!

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Thank you CasperAZ. I appreciate you honesty and thank you for having the time to see my poem. I love to write and nothing (besides my guitar) can make me happier.

[wyntermoon]

Very impressive for only being 12 years old.....great job....in reading your poem I feel that you have the potential to write some amazing stuff....