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First Poem
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07-22-2009 01:12 AM
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07-22-2009 03:27 AM
ToriSky, first of all, I want ot say that your poem is nice... I especially like the part : "Life has become a lonely road A path that seems to run the same course".
But there are parts that I don't quite understand..maybe because you typed it like was just a mere paragraph..maybe if you'd write it in the way poems are written, maybe I could understand it better..
But is has a potential, continue writing..![]()
Re: First Poem
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07-22-2009 06:32 AM
Hello ToriSky, welcome!!
I really liked the content of your poem. Like mOonseeKer, I think that formatting your poem would add quite a bit to it.
Try putting it in groups of thought, and put in a comma or a period where you think the reader should pause. But like I said, I liked the content!