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Mountain_Muse
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Hope Floats

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Holly requested that I post her latest poem on her behalf.  She has trouble posting in a correct poetry format and wanted this to post in it's proper form.  I hope you enjoy it and it's beauty as much as I have.

 

Mtn Muse

 

Hope Floats

.

Floating amongs the glassy sea,

Reflecting the clouds and drifting ships,

Hope looks for ones in need,

Ones like you and me.

.

Floating upon the rising swell,

She looks for you and me,

I hide behind the waves,

Afraid to see, to hope, to open up.

.

When the water rolls on,

And I stand there alone,

She is still there,

Hope is floating beside me.

.

She warms the chilly air,

She fills the darkest voids,

She has found you,

And now me.

.

Together as new friends,

Together we can share,

Together we can dream,

Together we can hope,

Together and keep each other afloat,

As we wave off hope,

Watching her give as she floats.

 

 

Holly
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Re: Hope Floats

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Thank you Muse! :smileyhappy: I hope you guys like. Not too gushy is it?
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shygirltn37
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Re: Hope Floats


GS2991 wrote:
Thank you Muse! :smileyhappy: I hope you guys like. Not too gushy is it?


holly your a writer in poetry thats an excellent poem

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Brandi_R
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Re: Hope Floats

Not too gushy! I like this image: "glassy sea." I'm less sure about the repetition of "together" in the last stanza. That felt a bit heavy. Lovely poem. 

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Hi there! Glad to here you say that. I pondered the word "together" hmm. Anyway. Thank you! Glad you like.
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korts
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Re: Hope Floats

I like it.  The poems you have shared with me make me really think.  I like relating to them.  i really feel like i can relate to you.

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Thank you.
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Duck tape is silver.

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optic_i
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Re: Hope Floats

A Poem by GS2991,

 

-Kitty Trails-

 

The kitty stalks,

the kitty walks,

upon the trail,

the trail to home.

 

A fluter of feathers,

a twitch of an ear,

a lucky pounce,

the kitty has dinner.

 

A russle of leaves,

a flick of a tail,

a swipe of a paw,

the kitty has a fury toy.

 

A ring of a bell,

a sprint along the trail,

the kitty comes home,

for a bowl of warm milk.

 

---- Holly

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GS2991
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Re: Hope Floats

Hey! Well thank you.
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shygirltn37
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Re: Hope Floats

that poem is adorable

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Jefferson_Thomas
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Re: Hope Floats


GS2991 wrote:
Thank you Muse! :smileyhappy: I hope you guys like. Not too gushy is it?

No, it's exactly the right amount of gushy; I liked it!  I liked the one about the cat, too!

 

Jeff 

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Thanks.
Silence is golden,
Duck tape is silver.

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