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Wordsmith
YeLLoWmisT
Posts: 210
Registered: 10-15-2009

My poem...

Hi guys. This is one of my latest poems... kindly tell me what you think of it. Thanks!

 

 

"BLUSHING"

 

I would never forget that day--

the day when he touched my hand.

That moment, I was so gay;

I felt luckiest in the land.

Though I know he didin't mean it,

I am still so happy.

His gntle hands were so neat;

I wanna press it deeply.

And there I am, blushing. Burning.

I thought I would pop out of my skin.

My heart was fast leaping.

I wanna grab his shoulder and there, lean.

Thought I'd go insane when he looks a t me;

Especially when he smiles at me.

But there was the reality that

he does not like me.

As a friend maybe,

but there's nothing more

that I could hope for.

Someone else owned him.

I can't take away him.

I wuld never win his heart.

It hurts to love someone that doesn't love you.

Just the faact that someone owns his heart

is more than enough to kill you.

But I'm still there, blushing.

Hoping that he'll like me.

Though I know I'm nothing,

I'm still trying to please him.

And what makes me of that?

A fool. That's what.

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Give laurels if you want! :smileyvery-happy: LOL

 

 

Hey guys, check this out:

http://www.storywrite.com/
It's cool! :smileyvery-happy:
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Flowering
Posts: 207
Registered: 11-15-2009
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Re: My poem...

The emotion expressed in this poem are very intense. reminds me of when I was younger, in a good way of course.

Wordsmith
YeLLoWmisT
Posts: 210
Registered: 10-15-2009

Re: My poem...

Thanks Flowering! :smileyvery-happy:

Hey guys, check this out:

http://www.storywrite.com/
It's cool! :smileyvery-happy:
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bLuec0wgurL09
Posts: 12
Registered: 11-23-2009
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Re: My poem...

Wow Yellowmist! I love it! You know, I'm beggining to be interested with your poems... post more! :smileyvery-happy:

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