05-03-2010 06:21 PM
Ok I wrote this in a rush...so not very good. Criticism please!
The music pounded,
Twenty bodies danced in the center.
The shimmering ball hung above, mirrors rounded,
The people are here to get out, and let the music enter.
Got dressed up so no one could see their feelings,
Got together with friends so they could vent.
Moving their hips and throwing their hands to the ceiling,
Driving around in a limousine, not worrying it’s just a rent.
The vibe of a party is addictive,
Drinking, not having a care in the world.
Chatting about nothing but everything attractive.
Partying is fun, dancing till your hair comes uncurled.
05-05-2010 01:30 PM
Thanks guys!! Yeah I have been writing downing poems a lot. I was just listening to music while I was writing and a really good song came on and I just thought, "why don't I write something happier this time?" Lol so I did!