Poem I wrote To Brighten Up Your Day!!!

[carmen22]

 To brighten everyones sprit and to start the new week off right here's a little poem I wrote that I hope everyone enjoys:

Happy Days!!!

I saw a bird today, Flying and soaring through the Sky

Blue, red and orange what beautiful colors 

Up, down, and all around never hitting ground

If only I had Wings

I saw a horse today, if only for a second

Blazing Black blur as she flew right on by

What I wouldn't give for that kind of speed

If only for an Hour

I saw a bunny today, hoping through the forest

Fluffy little thing, to cute to be true

I gave my Heart away

I saw an alligator today, I stayed far enough away

Strong and fast are they, sorry no lunch today

What would I do with so much strength?

Perhaps I'd give it all away

Everyone could use a little, to make it through the Day!!

Written By Krista Carmen Cole

 If you have seen this on another borad it's because I didn't realize there was a writing room which is totally cool I love to write Poems!!! Have a Great Day!!!

  Also if anyone else has any poems to brighten up peoples day please feel free to add I'd love to hear/read them!!!

[simple_girl]

Nice poem. I like the way you have taken a few animals and drawn from them what you envy. It is creative.

[A.Tross]

Honestly, that only depressed me. It was so sickly sweet I almost wanted to kill myself. And some grammar was incorrect. Sorry, my opinion.

[carmen22]

Well I'm sorry it depressed you. I wasn't going for that but people will have different interpretations I'm sure. I'm not a poet I just like to write sometimes and I thought this was the writing room so thats why I shared it but thanks for being honest and sorry I messed up on the gammer it wasn't intentional. 

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A.Tross wrote:
Honestly, that only depressed me. It was so sickly sweet I almost wanted to kill myself. And some grammar was incorrect. Sorry, my opinion.

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[twilight_fanat…]

I disagree with A. Tross. I think the poem was simply beautiful, and, though it is currently NIGHTTIME where I am, it certainly brightened my day.

"Even Supergirl has her kryptonite."

-A quote by moi

[carmen22]

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twilight_fanatic_01 wrote:

I disagree with A. Tross. I think the poem was simply beautiful, and, though it is currently NIGHTTIME where I am, it certainly brightened my day.

"Even Supergirl has her kryptonite."

-A quote by moi

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Thank you Twilight fanatic I appreciate that!!

[booklover37]

I agree with twilight_fanatic (sorry if thats wrong!) it was a really nice and well written poem. and i like how used you used the animals to describe everything. and it's really nice that you want to brighten up people's day!

[A.Tross]

Sorry, guys, that post was kinda mean. I was having a terrible day (personal reasons.)

[Dreamer4ever]

Hey, Krista, what's up?

I like the image that you paint in your poem. I did see some grammatical mistakes, but overall it really did make me smile and it was enjoyable to read. Hope to see you post more poems!

[birdsongDS]

Carmen, keep writing. Let your thoughts out and put them to pen. I have had bad days like A.Tross. One day I wasn't like that in my heart and wrote...

        Somewhere

  Something changed.

Life became important,

friends became my life.

         Taking gave way to

                   giving.

  Anger was pushed away by

                   love.

  Expectations changed to

                   reality.

        Somewhere

  Something changed.

Each day is a new chance.

I feel good as I am now.

[carmen22]

about the Grammar problems---

Okay so I don't usely right poems I just had an inspired moment. I wasn't sure on the grammar it was really just how I read it I guess. I guess thats what you get when you have no idea what your doing lol!! So the mistakes were not intentional just me trying to figure out how it should be read I was totally unsure about the grammer to begin with but things can be changed.

Message Edited by carmen22 on 04-07-2009 09:49 PM

[Dreamer4ever]

Oh, don't worry too much about it. Your poem only had minor mistakes. It wasn't bad. I've seen poems where grammar was bad, punctuation was used incorrectly, incorrect forms of words...all this to say that your's wasn't bad, and a lot of people could have overlooked them. It all takes practice. Hey, I'm still working on it, so I'm right there with you. But you should definitely continue writing poetry. It can be very relaxing to read and to write. Go for it!

[birdsongDS]

The first thing you have to do when you feel inspired is to get it down on paper. Punctuation can come later. Put it down so you will be able to go back and draw that same feeling from it again. Some you may never touch, others you will rework several times.

I thought I had it all together when I did my book. Then I had it proofed. lol Is there anyone perfect?

[carmen22]

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birdsongDS wrote:

I thought I had it all together when I did my book. Then I had it proofed. lol Is there anyone perfect?

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What kind of book and whats it called?

[birdsongDS]

Poetry, prose, and verses. Its been out about 2 months now. From the Shaddows of My Heart.  type it in to B&N and it will come up.

[Dreamer4ever]

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birdsongDS wrote:

The first thing you have to do when you feel inspired is to get it down on paper. Punctuation can come later. Put it down so you will be able to go back and draw that same feeling from it again. Some you may never touch, others you will rework several times.

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Good point. When you have something to write don't worry about punctuation and grammar. There's always time to rework it after you've got it down. Call it a rough draft. It's the first time to copy it down and the important part is getting it all out before you forget. Good advice!

[birdsongDS]

That is the only way I can do it. I have entries with just a few words and yet I know they will never be finished. Others I write to put my feelings down and then go back later and may a change to bring those feelings back to life. Some need silence and solitude, others just something to write on in the spur of a moment. Either way, it feels good to be inspired.