Short poem

[_K3LS3Y_]

just something i wrote a while ago in a not so good time. tell me what you think?

Hidden

I am hidden

from the views of the world

Only the spirits

can condemn me today

They thrash and blow

until I am nothing more

The wind can toss me

but I wish to be strong

to block out the pain

and the torment I feel

I cry out

but no one can hear me

or maybe no one understands

the words I am saying

People walk past me

people step on me

Am I merely a stepping stool

to anyone who feels they need it?

Why oh why

must I be hidden?

No matter how hard I try

the pain is still there,

the love I know is running out

and I don't think

I can get it back

[BLUEICEGAL]

wow kelsey... that really was amzing, it really touched me, which  never happens not from a poem anyway, i think its poems like these, you can feel that it isnt simply a poem but realy heartfelt feelings from a real person, it can sound cheesy or whatever but  really felt like i could feel your anger and hurt, you have something really beautriful there (something else i dont say very dten) but i mean it, it was lovely so thank you for putting it up, hope you post some more up

ps.. i hope your better now, it really does sound you were hurting alot..

[Paris22Liz]

I like the descriptive words.

Such words remind me of emotions and feelings I have felt.

The rhythm of the words flow perfect.

Good poem - I like it!

Liz

[passi0nate_1]

i really like this poem. It has a nice flow and a good rythm to it. The words are also very descriptive and there is some cool imagery in it. Very nice!!

[_K3LS3Y_]

Thank you so much. You have no idea what that means to me!

I'm not the greatest poem writer or even that good at all.

And i'm gonna tell you guys a secret... I didn't even try to make a nice flow or rythum or tone. I was just hurt and this is what came out. So you all saying this is good means the world to me! So thank you so very much!