11-13-2007 07:19 PM
Today I have to get my blood taken. Now I never used to be afraid of needles so I was perfectly fine until I saw the needle. All my friends say I have nerves of steel well they can all rethink that. Once I see the needle I'm in complete panic mode. Im thinking that I'm going to my execution or something. While all this is going on in my head my mom is talking to the doctor about what is wrong with me. The nurse is about to shove that giant needle into my left arm and I'm terrified so I do the most natural thing I could think of. I punched the nurse in the face. Now the doctor and my mom notice how freaked I am about the needle and everything so they tell me to calm down. That does not help at all though it makes me get even worse. I jump off the table a run out of the room and into some other place in the doctors office. While they're searching for me I'm thinking of an escape route and when I finally get one they find me. That was so not cool. They had to pratically strap me down on the table to get the blood drawn. When it's finally done and over with they give me a lollipop. Yeah like that helped any for the half an hour before that.
Well what do you think. It does sound better when I'm telling it in person though.
11-14-2007 05:31 PM
i like it! funny, entertaining. it would make a really good...hmm...what's the word...well short story. this is a good summary, and it would be cool if you added details to make it more interesting. also, putting it in past tense would make it sound more natural. over all, i would work on it but it has great potential!
ps...sorry if i sound harsh! i just don't want to give you false information.
11-15-2007 07:20 AM
don't listen to zip!
"Bombing for peace is like f***ing for virginity"
"There is no such thing as death, only the absence of life."
"There is no end, unless you let it."
11-15-2007 02:26 PM
That was really funny! I love short stories. They entertaining and easy to read! Lol
Give us more please? Short stories okay?
11-15-2007 04:32 PM
but hey, baker...i was in a crabby mood the other day...so sorry. i really did like it, and you should post more!
11-17-2007 03:11 PM
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