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Lenny3
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Stop! Money Tree ...Constructive Criticism Necessary

Never Praying, Always on knees,

The color of money, not of trees

The only zoo he knows

Is Donkey, Elephant, Bull and Bear,

The notes of music are ticker flows

And his wife's sweet voice, never there.

 

Martini in hand, cigar in another,

Brags about art, but not to brothers,

He showers at night, moisturizes in the glass

But looks down at the sink, because of his fear.

 

Makes money, takes money, and lies in mass,

Drives a company car no God could steer.

In one sharp moment he falls to his knees,

Still behind the wheel, he kills himself in a money tree.

 

Thanks for reading!

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Lenny3
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Re: Stop! Money Tree ...Constructive Criticism Necessary

The crowd has spoken.  Silence is deadlier than words. Sure no one wants to comment?
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twilight_fanatic_01
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Re: Stop! Money Tree ...Constructive Criticism Necessary

I like how you used your poem to compare a money tree to a person's greed. The rhyme scheme confused me - in certain parts it was ABAB, while in others it didn't rhyme at all. It was a very cool poem in my opinion. Keep writing :-)
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Re: Stop! Money Tree ...Constructive Criticism Necessary

i have to agree with twilight