another poem

[books4life48]

   heres another! hope u like it! p.s. no title kind of a bad poem

                                   As i lie awake,wondering where you could be,

                                  the night sky slowly starts to unravel,

                             unveiling the whole universe, much bigger than i thought,

                                    i guess i will never see you again....goodbye

[tiffany57]

I like it.  you could make it longer too.  you could add something like-

As I lie awake,

wondering where you could be.

The night passes on,

and slowly starts to unravel.

The whole universe unveiling its self,

much bigger than I thought.

Feeling alne in a world,

without you.

Tears slowly run down my face,

with no one there to help me though.

Why'd you leave?  Is a question to me.

How could you,

let me be like this.

Alone.

Knowing for a fact,

I will never seee you again.

Good bye.

[Night_Angel]

Like it, also like Tiffany's idea for your poem. 

[passi0nate_1]

Very nice poem! I also agree that a longer version would be cool too.

[books4life48]

thx guys! mayb i will make it longer! but a different version from tiffanys cuz its her version