03-15-2009 09:15 AM
The eyes that kill me
Blue beautiful eyes
So much love in them
Beautiful babyboy eyes
The smile that melts my heart
I want to kiss those soft lips
And take away that beautiful smile
If you kiss me back, you can have your smile
When i look at your beautiful face
You make my heart complete
I want to look into your eyes and smile back
And tell you that I Love You
this poem i made cause i had a crush on someone but never gave him this poem... i chickened out but in the beginning you can put blue or brown for the eye color...
04-15-2009 02:57 PM - edited 04-15-2009 03:22 PM
Very nice, Hopper! You might get more feedback if you put your poems like this in the Teen Forum.
Don't give up! Your poetry is both beautiful and heartfelt. The emotions are raw and genuine, and it's obvious you had someone specific in mind when you wrote it.
As a married lady, I'm unsure how your "crush" would have reacted if you had given him this poem. Maybe someone in the Teen Forum could answer that for you.
04-20-2009 03:27 PM
That was really good! I can tell that you really like him. You should try to give it to him, maybe he'll say something.
I loved it!
Yes I'm gonna be a star,
Baby you can drive my car,
And Baby I love you,
Beep Beep, Beep Beep, Yea!